Subject: [Capwap] FW: Gen-art review of draft-ietf-capwap-802dot11-mib-05.txt

From: "Romascanu, Dan (Dan)" <[email-masked]>
Date: Mon, 14 Dec 2009 12:07:08 +0100

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Subject: Gen-art review of draft-ietf-capwap-802dot11-mib-05.txt

I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviewer
for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see
_http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html_).

Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments
you may receive.

Document: draft-ietf-capwap-802dot11-mib-05.txt
Reviewer: Elwyn Davies
Review Date: 12 December 2009
IETF LC End Date: 7 December 2009
IESG Telechat date: (if known)=

Summary: Ready for the IESG.  There are a few editorial nits noted below
(the example IP addresses need to be fixed).

Major issues: -

Minor issues: -

Nits/editorial comments:

s3: WLAN is defined but no expansion of the acronym is given.
s5.1: Possibly define/expand PHY.
s5.2, next to last bullet: s/manage/management/ s5.3, last sentence;
expand BSS acronym
s7.2: The paragraph
>    Also, the AC MUST have a mechanism that preserves the value of the
>    WLAN Profile Interfaces' ifIndexes in the ifTable at AC reboot.
>   
is duplicated (last and last but 2).
s8:  The IP addresses should be taken from the 'example' ranges (see
http://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-iana-ipv4-examples-01).  I don't know
that there is an example MAC address - the RFC Editor should know.
s9: Maybe WLAN and BSS should be expanded here in the descriptions as
well.

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