Subject: [issue75] More nits - Section 6.9 to appendix C

From: Ellen M Deleganes <[email-masked]>
Date: Tue, 15 Nov 2005 19:01:18 +0000

New submission from Ellen M Deleganes <[email-masked]>:

6.9 (Message Header)
Does the ACK flag have to be set to either 'NoACK' or 'AlwaysACK'? If so, the 
sentence should read: "The ACK flag in the header MUST be set to 
either 'NoACK' or 'AlwaysACK' when the HB is sent."
"Correlator field can be ignored" is too vague.

7.1 /association have/ --> /associations have/
  /it by enabling the FE/ --> /it enables the FE/

7.2 /Figure below helps/ --> /The figure below helps/

8. (1st paragraph)
 /there can only be one Primary CE controlling the FEs and there/ -->
 /only one Primary CE can control the FEs, but there/

 (2nd paragraph)
  /There are 2 modes of HA defined/ --> /Two HA modes are defined/

8.1.
 (PL Level:)
  /All the other/ --> /For all the other/

9.
  (1st bullet)
    /Security mechanism/ --> /Security mechanisms/
    /controlled that is/ --> /controlled. That is,/
  (2nd bullet)
    /uniform operations/ --> /uniform operation/
  (3rd bullet)
    /pre-established/ --> /pre-establish/
    /reduce the security/ --> /reduce the number of security messages 
exchanged/

9.1
  (1st para)
    /When No security/ --> /When "No security"/
    /needs be performed/ --> /needs to be performed/
    /within an single/ --> /within a single/

9.1.1.
    /PL layer maintain set of association list/ -->
    /PL layer maintains a set of association lists/

    /FE MSUT connect/ --> /An FE MUST connect/
    /similarly CE should/ --> /similarly, a CE should/

10. /Allan DeKok/ --> /Alan DeKok/

B.4.
  /TheLFB/ --> /The LFB/
  /iws/ --> /is/

B.5
  Every instance of Response is misspelled as "Repsonse" (also Responses 
as "Repsonses")

C. I didn't look at the XML carefully, but noticed that the RFC references 
need to be resolved, currently they are "XXXX".

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category: Editorial
draft: draft-ietf-forces-protocol
messages: 376
nosy: ellen
priority: May fix
status: No discussion
title: More nits - Section 6.9 to appendix C

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