Subject: [Pce] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-pce-global-concurrent-optimization-10

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Date: Fri, 3 Apr 2009 22:01:07 -0400

I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) 
reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see 
http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html). 

Please wait for direction from your document shepherd 
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Document: draft-ietf-pce-global-concurrent-optimization-10
Reviewer: David L. Black
Review Date: April 3, 2009
IESG Telechat date: April 9, 2009

Summary:

This draft is basically ready for publication, but has nits
that should be fixed before publication.

Comments:

The -10 draft addresses all of the points noted in the
Gen-ART review of the -08 version.  Unfortunately,
idnits 2.11.08 found a few things to complain about:

  ** You're using the IETF Trust Provisions Section 6.b License Notice
from
     10 Nov 2008 rather than the newer Notice from 12 Feb 2009, which is
     required now.  (See http://trustee.ietf.org/license-info/)

  ** There are 3 instances of too long lines in the document, the
longest one
     being 2 characters in excess of 72.

  == The document seems to lack a disclaimer for pre-RFC5378 work, but
was
     first submitted before 10 November 2008.  Should you add the
disclaimer?
     (See the Legal Provisions document at
     http://trustee.ietf.org/license-info for more information.).

  == Missing Reference: 'PCEP' is mentioned on line 565, but not defined

The RFC Editor can take care of the "too long lines" item,
but the other three items need attention.

Thanks,
--David
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