Subject: [provreg] Review of draft-lozano-tmch-func-spec-05

From: Alexander Mayrhofer <[email-masked]>
Date: Tue, 23 Apr 2013 11:54:33 +0000

Hi,

i've reviewed draft-lozano-tmch-func-spec, here are my comments:

- Abstract: The text contains "Domain Name Registry" as well as "domain name Registry" - is this intentional?

- Introduction: Why is "Data Formats" capitalized? 

- 5.2.1 / 5.2.2 (Sunrise domain registration): I understand that "registration" in the sense of executing a sunrise "create" command could either be direct "Allocation", or the creation of an "Application". Some text that clarifies these options would be good, because "registration" could be mis-interpreted as "direct, immediate allocation". 

- page 27 (5.2.3): Theres a broken literal "xref" in bullet 4.

- 6.1 (DNL List): I understand that the DNL is always a "full" list, containing all DNLs that match a PRM? Clarifying text would be appreciated here.

- 6.2 (SMD revocation): I do assume it would always include all revoked SMDs.  Also "Version 1 MUST always be present" could maybe be changed to "MUST be set to '1' for this version of the specification".. Same in Section 6.3 and Section 6.3.1

- 6.3 (LORDN file): should a LORDN file contain only domains effectively allocated since the last accepted LORDN file, or should it always contain the domains of the current day, or should it contain all domains allocated since the start of the Sunrise period? I suppose either the  second option - some text clarifying this would be good (unless i've missed it?). 

- 6.3: <DN registered>: mention that the A-Label is to be used, eg. "The domain name that was allocated in A-Label representation".

- Section 6.3.1: The "first line" specification of the LORDN log file has a missing comma between <LORDN Log creation datetime> and >LORDN file creation datetime>.

- 6.3.1.1: I understand that a single "err" class outcome in the LORDN logfile indicates that the whole file was rejected, and the Registry shall repeat with a corrected file? Clarification would be good here as well..

- 6.3.1.1: I understand that since "ROID notified earlier" is just a warning, a LORDN file can effectively contain domain names that have been reported earlier wihout processing to fail...

tia,

Alex