Subject: Re: [CCAMP] Erik Kline's No Objection on draft-ietf-ccamp-layer0-types-08: (with COMMENT)

From: Zhenghaomian <[email-masked]>
Date: Wed, 16 Dec 2020 07:16:10 +0000

Hi Erik, 

Thank you for the comments, see inline and refer to the https://github.com/ietf-ccamp-wg/draft-ietf-ccamp-layer0-types/pull/15 for our proposed changes. 

Best wishes,
Haomian (on behalf of all authors)

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COMMENT:
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[[ nits ]]

[ section 3 ]

* "min-slot-width-factor" and "max-slot-width-factor" could each have their
  description be simplified to refer only their own definition (as opposed
  to the shared duplicated text).

  Also, I'm not sure how to read "...of the slot width , granularity,".
  Should that just be "...of the slot width granularity,"?

[authors] This issue is also mentioned in Rob's review in https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/ccamp/EaueCtWSbdlW_-14SB-cc_oOYaQ/. We tweaked the text and the update can be found in https://github.com/ietf-ccamp-wg/draft-ietf-ccamp-layer0-types/pull/15. 

* "this constraints is reported" could use a grammar fix. I'm guessing
  "this constraint is reported"?

[authors] Updated in https://github.com/ietf-ccamp-wg/draft-ietf-ccamp-layer0-types/pull/15 as well.