Subject: GEN-ART review for draft-li-pwe3-ms-pw-pon-03

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Date: Mon, 27 Jun 2011 09:08:45 -0400

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Document:  draft-li-pwe3-ms-pw-pon-03
Reviewer:  Kathleen Moriarty
Review Date: June 27, 2011
IETF LC End Date:
IESG Telechat date: June 28, 2011

Summary:  This document is ready with nits.

Major issues:

Minor issues:

Nits/editorial comments:

The acronym PW is used in the abstract and is not defined until the introduction.  Please fix.

Paragraph 7 of the introduction, last sentence:
Change from "Besides coding and
   maintenance of these new protocols, a much powerful CPU and more
   memory are also necessary for them to run smoothly."
To: "Besides coding and
   maintenance of these new protocols, a much more powerful CPU and more
   memory are also necessary for them to run smoothly."
If you do not want to repeat the word more, consider the word additional to replace the second instance of more.

Last paragraph of Section 4:
Consider changing from: "OMCI supports the configuration of a number of PW types including
   TDM, ATM, and Ethernet, and the protocol can also be used to allow
   the ONU to notify the OLT of the status of the AC."
To: "OMCI supports the configuration of a number of PW types including
   TDM, ATM, and Ethernet.  The protocol can also be used to allow
   the ONU to notify the OLT of the status of the AC."