Subject: [Gen-art] Gen-art last call review of draft-zeilenga-ldap-entrydn-01

From: Elwyn Davies <[email-masked]>
Date: Fri, 02 Mar 2007 17:33:27 +0000

I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART)
reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see
http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html).

Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments
you may receive.

Document: draft-zeilenga-ldap-entrydn-01
Reviewer: Elwyn Davies
Review Date: 2 March 2007
IETF LC End Date: 30 March 2007
IESG Telechat date: (if known) -

Summary:
Ready for proposed standard.

Editorial nits if you are revising:

idnits warns that the RFC2119 language isn't actually used.

s1, para 4: s/Search filters above is described using/The example search filter shown in the previous paragraph specifies the components to be matched using/
s1, para 4: s/'componetFilterMatch'/'componentFilterMatch'/

s4.1: The first sentence is not good English. 

's5.4'?  Should this be 4.2?  If so the following sections need renumbering. Also the first sentence needs fixing up in the same way as s4.1. 

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