Subject: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Telechat Review of draft-ietf-sipcore-location-conveyance-08

From: Pete McCann <[email-masked]>
Date: Fri, 17 Jun 2011 13:02:12 -0500

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Document: draft-ietf-sipcore-location-conveyance-08
Reviewer: Pete McCann
Review Date: June 17 2011
IETF LC End Date:
IESG Telechat date: June 23 2011

Summary: Ready

Major issues: none

Minor issues: none

Nits/editorial comments:

Section 3:
   therefore any of the diagrams the SIP intermediary receives the SIP
   request is potentially an LR
SHOULD BE:
   therefore in any of the diagrams the SIP intermediary that receives the SIP
   request is potentially an LR

Section 3.3:
   in order to be location recipient
SHOULD BE:
   in order to be a location recipient

   It could be the case that
   a SIP intermediary which does not perform location-based routing but
   does care when Alice includes her location;
SHOULD BE:
   It could be the case that
   a SIP intermediary which does not perform location-based routing
   does care when Alice includes her location;