Subject: [Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-mmusic-media-loopback-22

From: "Moriarty, Kathleen" <[email-masked]>
Date: Tue, 11 Sep 2012 20:53:46 -0400

I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on
Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at

<http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq> .

Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments
you may receive.

Document: draft-ietf-mmusic-media-loopback-22
Reviewer: Kathleen Moriarty
Review Date: 9/11/12
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Summary:  The document is well written, and is ready for publication with a few nits to resolve.

Major issues:

Minor issues:

Nits/editorial comments:

At the start of page 8, some of the names to the right of the "=" are in quotes and some are not, should this be consistent?  I would assume the entire expression would be in quotes for the ones that are not or no quotes are used for the other entries.

The fist paragraph on the page does not need a comma as only two items are joined.  A comma is used for three or more.  Change from:
"The loopback-type values are rtp-pkt-loopback, and rtp-media-loopback."
To: "The loopback-type values are rtp-pkt-loopback and rtp-media-loopback."

Section 6, third paragraph, replace "re-generates" with "regenerates" in the 7th line.

Section 10, Second paragraph, recommend breaking the second sentence into two, it's a bit long.