Subject: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-l3vpn-mvpn-mldp-nlri-06

From: Meral Shirazipour <[email-masked]>
Date: Mon, 27 Oct 2014 07:05:46 +0000

I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq.

Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive.

Document: draft-ietf-l3vpn-mvpn-mldp-nlri-06
Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour
Review Date: 2014-10-27
IETF LC End Date:  2014-10-27
IESG Telechat date: NA

Summary:
This draft is ready to be published as Standards Track RFC but I have some  comments .

Nits/editorial comments:
Nits:
-[Page 3] Section 1, "an SP may"---->"a SP may"
-[Page 3] Section 1," "Subsequent Address Family" (SAFI)"---->" "Subsequent Address Family Identifier" (SAFI)"
-[Page 3] Section 1, "Forwarding Equivalance"---->"Forwarding Equivalence"
-[Page 5] PMSI first use not spelled out (P-Multicast Service Interface) Tunnel
-[Page 6], "of these route"---->"of these routes" or "of these route types"
-[Page 8], "the the NLRI"---->"the NLRI"
-[Page 8] Range 0x41-0x7f, why not Range 0x40-0x7f ?
0x40-0x42 is specified as reserved. (should it be Range 0x43-0x7f ?)

-[Page 11] References, [BGP-ERR] has a new revision (rfc editor should review the work in progress versions)

Best Regards,
Meral
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Meral Shirazipour
Ericsson
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