Subject: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Telechat Call review of draft-ietf-netmod-entity-07

From: Meral Shirazipour <[email-masked]>
Date: Fri, 22 Dec 2017 22:23:28 +0000

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Document: draft-ietf-netmod-entity-07
Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour
Review Date: 2017-12-22
IETF LC End Date: NA
IESG Telechat date: 2018-01-09

Summary: This draft is ready to be published as Standards Track  RFC.

Major issues:
Minor issues:
Nits/editorial comments:
-Many occurrences : "an sensor"--->"a sensor"
-Although mentioned in Section 9, it would be good for context setting to also add similar text to Intro or Abstract Section:
"
The YANG modules specified in this document define a schema for data
   that is designed to be accessed via network management protocols such
   as NETCONF [RFC6241] or RESTCONF [RFC8040].

"

Best Regards,
Meral
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Meral Shirazipour
Ericsson Research
www.ericsson.com