Subject: Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Telechat Call review of draft-ietf-netmod-entity-07

From: Martin Bjorklund <[email-masked]>
Date: Mon, 08 Jan 2018 12:15:05 +0100 (CET)

Hi,

Thank you for your review!

Meral Shirazipour <[email-masked]> wrote:
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> Document: draft-ietf-netmod-entity-07
> Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour
> Review Date: 2017-12-22
> IETF LC End Date: NA
> IESG Telechat date: 2018-01-09
> 
> Summary: This draft is ready to be published as Standards Track  RFC.
> 
> Major issues:
> Minor issues:
> Nits/editorial comments:
> -Many occurrences : "an sensor"--->"a sensor"

Fixed in my local copy.

> -Although mentioned in Section 9, it would be good for context setting to also add similar text to Intro or Abstract Section:
> "
> The YANG modules specified in this document define a schema for data
>    that is designed to be accessed via network management protocols such
>    as NETCONF [RFC6241] or RESTCONF [RFC8040].
> 
> "

I think that if we add this to this document, the same text should be
added to all documents defining YANG modules.  It should probably be a
recommended template defined in rfc6087bis.  This issue should
probably be discussed in the WG first.

/martin

> Best Regards,
> Meral
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> Meral Shirazipour
> Ericsson Research
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