Subject: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Telechat Call review of draft-mm-wg-effect-encrypt-15

From: Meral Shirazipour <[email-masked]>
Date: Sat, 27 Jan 2018 01:32:06 +0000

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Document: draft-mm-wg-effect-encrypt-15
Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour
Review Date: 2018-01-26
IETF LC End Date: 2017-12-04
IESG Telechat date: 2018-02-08

Summary: This draft is ready to be published as Informational  RFC .

Major issues:
Minor issues:
Nits/editorial comments:
-few occurrences: "pervassive"--->"pervasive"
-[Page 6], Sec 1.1, "were were built "---->"were built "
-[Page 12] , "scaleability"--->"scalability" x2
-[Page 16] , "unaccessible"--->"inaccessible"
-[Page 29] ,"depening"--->"depending", "permited"--->"permitted "
-[Page 31], "rasises"---->"raises", "encyption"---->"encryption", "visibilty"--->"visibility"

Best Regards,
Meral
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Meral Shirazipour
Ericsson Research
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From: "MORTON, ALFRED C (AL)" <[email-masked]>
Date: Sat, 27 Jan 2018 13:47:24 +0000

Thanks Meral, we'll make these edits in the
working version.

Kathleen and Al

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Meral
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