Subject: [Mip6] [issue69] Editorial

From: Vijay Devarapalli <[email-masked]>
Date: Sun, 05 Mar 2006 22:10:26 +0000

New submission from Vijay Devarapalli <[email-masked]>:

Jari Arkko wrote:

MIP6 Working Group                                        V. Devarapalli
Internet-Draft                                                     Nokia
Expires: April 26, 2006                                        F. Dupont
                                                                 Point6
                                                       October 23, 2005

The header says nothing about the relationship to RFC 3776.
Updates? Obsoletes? Personally, I think "updates" would make
more sense, but this is related to the issue of whether you
want to carry the manual SA stuff from 3776 here.  Its quite
a lot to carry, and everyone who uses manual SAs can still
use 3776, so no one would actually lose anything. But YMMV,
maybe you wanted to show how you get rid of per-interface
policies with the new architecture.

Editorial:

  The IPsec architecture has been revised [5].  Among the many changes,

Maybe "RFC 3776 was, however, defined for the first revision
of the IPsec architecture. The second revision [5] has introduced..."
And change "revised IPsec architecture" later in the document
to "the second revision of the IPsec architecture". (Or is the
2nd? Was the something before 2401? Anyway, my point is that
when someone reads this 10 years from now, it may no longer
be obvious what "revised ipsec architecture" means.)

If the
  home address of the mobile node changes, the SPD and SAD entries need
  to re-created or updated for the new home address.

s/need to/need to be/

    The author would like to thank Mika Joutsenvirta, Pasi Eronen,
    Francis Dupont, Jari Arkko, Gerardo Giaretta and Shinta Sugimoto for
    reviewing the draft.

Francis is thanking himself :-)

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category: Editorial
draft: draft-ietf-mip6-ikev2-ipsec
messages: 212
nosy: vijay
priority: Should fix
status: Accepted
title: Editorial

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